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PostSubject: Shiranai-sama   Shiranai-sama Icon_minitimeThu Jul 22, 2010 2:13 pm

Basic Info

Name:
Bishamonten Uchiha
Alias: Shiranai-sama (from Shiranai Hito which means stranger)
Age: A bit over a century
Gender: Male
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Appearance: Shiranai-sama 34qpy4z dressed in a hooded male kimono Shiranai-sama Male_kimono2 with a necklace of magatama hidden underneath his attire.

Personality:

-Caring
-Respectful
-Kind Hearted
-Good-intented
-Calm
-Helper
-Listener

Skill & Rank Info
Village: Wanderer, affiliates with Konoha.
Rank: S-rank

Skill Specialty- Perception, Huge chakra pool, Speed.

Primary: Ninjutsu
Secondary: Genjutsu


Chakra Element: Fire (Wind through Fan)

Jutsu
E-rank Jutsus

Body Replacement Technique
Transformation Technique
Clone Technique

D-rank Jutsus

Body Flicker

Manipulated Shuriken Technique (??????, Soshuriken no Jutsu)
Type: D-rank, Supplementary, All ranges
With this technique a translucent string, both elastic and highly durable, is attached to a shuriken, making it possible to alter its path after having thrown it. An expert will have the ability to freely glide the shuriken in any direction with just a single movement of their fingertip.

Fuuma Ninken - Fuuma Ninja Sword
Art: Taijutsu
Rank: D
Type: Attack
Range: Close (0-5m)

Description: Using some sort of sword, the user will lunge at the enemy and deliver a devastating blow at high speed.

Name: Demonic Illusions: Hell Viewing Technique
Rank: D-rank
Type: Genjutsu
Element: None
Description:
This is a genjutsu that reveals the fears that dwell inside people's hearts. Everyone has an image of the one thing they wouldn't want to ever see. This genjutsu is a technique that draws forth such an image from within the heart and has one mistake it for reality. First, an imaginary circle of leaves will spin around and envelop the target, falling away shortly after. After a short period, the illusion will begin. This is to make the illusion more convincing, since the user will likely have moved before the illusion sets in. If the mental image is a gruesome one, the shock will be accordingly great.

Name: Holy Warning Sound
Rank: D-rank
Type: Genjutsu
Element: None
Description: Using the bells on his staff he would cast a genjutsu on the foe but a hearing contact is needed and when it is achieved the genjutsu will begin.
It begins with massive bleeding from the ears as the sound is suddenly amplified a lot. This can be hardly recognized as a genjutsu and despite being D-rank many high ranked ninjas might be killed thanks to there unawareness.

C-rank Jutsus

Reppushou - Gale Wind Palm
Art: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Type: Attack
Range: Close (0-5m), Mid (5-10m)

Description: Fuuton • Reppushou is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Wind Element. After forming the needed hand seals, the user will send a strong gust of wind towards their target while acting in conjunction with another thrown weapon, increasing its power and deadliness.

Name: Fire Release: Great Fireball Technique
Rank: C-rank
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description:
A technique where chakra kneaded inside the body is converted into fire, and expelled from the mouth in a massive orb of roaring flame. The scope of the attack is altered by controlling the volume of chakra that is mustered. The released flames will engulf their target, and leave a crater on the ground's surface. The fireball is normally blown through a ring made by the thumb and index finger of the user. However, that is not mandatory to perform it.

Name: Fire Release: Phoenix Immortal Fire Technique
Rank: C-rank
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description:
This technique creates small fireballs, which are spat out of the user's mouth, flying wildly in every direction and assaulting the enemy. In addition, the flames are controlled one by one with chakra, so avoiding them all is extremely, difficult. Shuriken can be hid within the flames, creating an unexpected secondary surprise attack. Like the flames they can be controlled with chakra. For the most part, however, this technique is used as a distraction.

Name: Wind Release: Dust Wind Technique (Fusajin no Jutsu)
Rank: C-rank
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Wind
Descritpion:
Shiranai creates a gust of wind that layers an area in loose sand and dust. Doing so also acts as a sandblaster on the surrounding area, causing the surface of trees to become like saw dust. This layer of debris makes it difficult for others to get a good footing. The initial gust can also temporarily blind opponents by lodging sand in their eyes.

Name: Ise Kagura
Rank: C-rank
Type: Taijutsu
Element: Fire
Description: The Ise Kagura dance is based upon the yudate which is a boiling water rites of Shugendo origin and includes miko dances and usage of items. This is a defensive style of taijutsu and Shiranai heats all his body using his fire chakra and becomes hardly touchabe against physical attacks due to the heat which would hurt the enemy badly. Attacks are based on slow movements but are easily anticipated so it is mostly a defensive style.

Name: Demonic Illusion: Mirror Heaven and Earth Change
Rank: C-rank
Type: Reflect Genjutsu
Element: None
Description:
The user decrypts a genjutsu that has been applied onto them, and casts back a technique with identical effects onto the opponent. It's a form of illusion reversal, but in order to instantly read through a technique and cast it in return, the Sharingan's power is necessary. As genjutsu is initially used to confuse the enemy, this technique which sends it right back to its caster deals a high amount of mental damage, more than anything else

Arijigoku no Jutsu - Ant-Lion Technique
Art: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary
Range: Close (0-5m), Mid (5-10m)
Description: The user will form a large conical crater in the ground, which will draw and trap careless opponents.

Satsujin Konmei no Karasu - Murder of Crows Confusion
Art: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary Per Turn
Range: Any
Description: Calling upon a swarm of crows, they will fly around the target, causing confusion with their dark forms and quick movement. With the target distracted by the crows, the ninja can strike more easily. Also the mass of crows can obscure any retreating ninja. When no longer needed, the murder of crows will simply puff away in smoke.
Limit: None

B-rank Jutsus

Name:Fire Release: Great Dragon Fire Technique
Rank: B-rank
Type:Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description:The user compresses a large amount of chakra built up inside their body and changes its shape into a dragon-shaped fireball. The user then skillfully manipulates that great fire, and attacks their opponent. Even outside of the attack range, its power and reliability are stressed. The flames have a high temperature, as they can create an updraught which in turn can give rise to thunder clouds. A master of this technique can fire off several flames in succession. Anyone caught in the technique could potentially be reduced to ashes.

Name: Fire Release: Ash Pile Burning
Rank: B-rank
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description:
The user spews a stream of Chakra-altered gun-powdered ash from their mouth, which surrounds the region. As the gunpowder it's composed entirely of ash, it stays in the air around the victim like a cloud. After surrounding the enemy with the ash, the user can ignite it with a flint placed on their teeth beforehand to create a spark, resulting in a violent explosion, burning the enemy. However, this technique requires keen senses to read the air currents, the insight to read the movements of the enemy, the tactical experience to not also enfold one's allies in the flames, and careful attention for the timing of the ignition.

Name: Wind Release: Pressure Damage (Futon: Atsugai)
Rank: B-rank
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Wind
Description:
A powerful wind technique which is released by Shiranai's fan. A tornado-like mass is compressed until it has a very high density and is then released. The wind pressure is raised to its highest limit, and once the technique hits the target, everyone will be swept off their feet.
If the technique is used by someone who has mastered wind nature transformation, the blast can hit a vast range, inflicting massive damage on both the target and their surroundings.

Kuu no Tachi - Long Sword of the Sky
Art: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Type: Attack
Range: Close (0-5m), Mid (5-10m)

Description: This technique allows the user to levitate their sword. Forming the needed hand seal will cause the sword to activate and strike out against any enemy in the nearby area.

Name: Shadow Clone Technique (Kage Bushin no Jutsu)
Rank: B-rank
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: None
Description:
Similar to the Clone Technique, this jutsu creates clones of the user. But unlike the Clone Technique, these clones are actual copies, not illusions. The user's chakra is evenly distributed among every clone, giving each clone an equal fraction of the user's overall power. The clones are capable of performing jutsu on their own and can even bleed, but will usually disperse after one or two solid blows. They can also disperse on their own. The clones will be created in roughly the same condition as the original.

Name: Barrier Encampment Technique
Rank: B-rank
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: None
Description:
An array of four exploding tags are jointly placed around the boundary of an area. If anyone or anything happens to walk through the boundary, the seals will instantly activate and explode, killing the imprisoned target.

Name: Summoning Technique: Tanuki (Kuchyose no Jutsu: Tanuki)
Rank: B-rank
Type: Summoning
Element: None
Description: Shiranai has signed a contract with the holy tanuki creatures since he has redempted himself and became a priest. The Tanuki are profficient trackers, their bites are poisonous and would stop chakra movement on the bitten place temporarily and are efficient at distracting enemies.

Name: Summoning Technique: Blade Creation (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Kenka)
Type: B-rank, Offensive, Short to mid-range (0-10m)
User: Sasuke Uchiha
This jutsu works by placing a summoning mark on one or both of the user’s wrists. This mark will allow the user to quickly summon multiple bladed weapons of various sizes and forms.

Name:Haraegushi Ritual
Rank: B-rank
Type: Medical jutsu
Element: None
Description:
This jutsu has a wide variety of uses. If used in battle it will heal only minor to medium sized external injuries but only minor internal injuries. If done within a day long ritual this would heal most of the user and refresh him greatly.

Name: Miko Kagura
Rank: B-rank
Type: Taijutsu
Element: None
Description: Miko Kagura is the oldest type of Kagura it is usually danced by a woman and is characterized by slow, elegant and circular movements by emphasis to the four directions and by the use of items in attack and defence. This dance is based on sheer power using the slow movements of it so it can deliver greater damage, defence is based on elegant agile movements. This is mostly a counter style which would disbalance the enemy and use the advantage of being defenceless after the counter to hammer down a strong hit.

Name: Izumo Kagura
Rank: B-rank
Type: Taijutsu and Genjutsu
Element: none
Description: the Izumo Kagura dance is possibly the most popular dance from the Kagura and has a few variations. As a taijutsu style Shiranai uses his rings on his buddhist staff to make the enemy see many illusions of Shiranai and as that happens Shiranai would attack with the illusions. The hit of course would only be made by one as the other are just mirages. The genjutsu in this style makes it a formidable style because almost always the attacks would connect thanks to the distractions of the illusions.

Name: Shishi Kagura
Rank: B-rank
Type: Taijutsu
Element: None
Description:
This dance is based on the movements of a lion or a mountain animal and is a fierce fast and fiery. Just as the dance the taijutsu style emphasis mostly on fast, powerful attacks and the user would mostly be in an agressive stance and would mostly attack rather than defend. There is no defence in this dance and that is it's weakness.

Fire Illusion Kaleidoscope (?????, Kagen Mangekyou)
Type: B-rank, Offensive, Supplementary, All ranges (0-10+)
Users: Shiranai-sama
This technique was one of the first few Genjutsu's created by Ninja, Made by Shiranai-sama. This technique draws in a small amount of fire chakra from the body while Shiranai's eyes glow brightly. From the light which shines all around chains form, Shooting at the target as the illusion begins. Slowly the chains begin to bind the opponent as flames begin to run through they're body. In this illusion there body is engulfed in flames as they burn to ash. Once the genjutsu ends the opponent is left blinded and with severe pain, Making them only able to see things in a Kaleidoscope form.

Name: Freezing Chain Torture
Rank: B-rank
Type: Genjutsu
Element: None
Description:
Shiranai casts the genjutsu as soon as the background changes to a frozen world where the enemy is held by chains which start rupturing his body and turn his bones into chains while the freezing adds much to the mental trauma

Name: Melody of Angels
Rank: B-rank
Type: Genjutsu
Element: none
Description: Using the bells on the staff Shiranai would swing the staff making a weird melody of the bells and when the enemy hears that the genjutsu begins.
It begins by seeing Shiranai suddenly appearing from behind and stabbing you with a sword. The hostile target would feel as he is dying and would really feel as he is dying and soon the melody would continue as he witnesses his soul being taken by a pair of angels. This might deliver a mental trauma to unexperienced ninjas.

A-rank Jutsus

Name: Summoning Technique: Huge Shrine (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Dekkai Jingu)
Rank: A-rank
Type: Summoning
Element: None
Description:
Using the seals written on his arms he would quickly summon a jutsu similiar to the Rashomon Technique but Shiranai summons instead a huge wooden shrine which even though might be wooden it is as hard as iron and can not be penetrated easily.

Name: Blade of Wind (Kaze no Yaiba)
Rank: A-rank
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Wind
Description:
This technique is a pinpoint slashing strike, where the user emits chakra from their fingertips and materializes it into an invisible sword that assaults the enemy in a gust of wind and making a slicing sound. If the Sickle Weasel Technique can be regarded as a swarm of wind kunai, then this jutsu is an uncatchable, unavoidable longsword. It leaves very deep slashes on the enemy.
This technique is created by the fan either and by Shiranai-sama's fingertips.

Name: Wind Release: Vacuum Wave (Futon: Shinkuha)
Rank: A-rank
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: wind
Description:
The user takes a deep breath and spins his body around while exhaling a large blade of wind so that it covers an angle of about 180 degrees around the user. The resulting blast is large enough to slice through multiple targets, causing great damage. While more than sufficient to cause crippling, if not fatal, damage, it is incapable of cutting all the way through human flesh.

Name: A Hawk Born From A Kite (Tobi Gataka Oumu)
Rank: A-rank
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: None
Description :This technique was developed by Shiranai. Much as the Uchiha clan is resembled to Tengu, Which have hawk forms, This technique was related to the clan but not used by it. The name hawk which resembles flying, And the uchiha ability to move fast are in relation to the technique, as the name "Kite" comes in this technique. With this technique Shiranai is able to move with the speed of two times a body flicker, though this technique takes stamina so it is not used non-stop, Making it a last resort.

Name: Shuriken Shadow Clone Technique (Shuriken Kage Bushin no Jutsu)
Rank: A-rank
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: None
Description:
The user creates a thousand shadow clones from one shuriken, striking down the enemy. This is a technique that combines ninja tools with ninjutsu. Compared to normal shadow clones, clones of material objects are said to be on a far higher level. There is no need for preparations beforehand, like stocking up on shuriken, yet since the shadow clones are real and not illusions, all the shadow blades that fly around are equally lethal. Because the clones form in just an instant, completely evading them is next to impossible.

Name: Summoning Technique: Old Tombstone ( Chuuko Bohi )
Rank: A-rank
Type: Summoning
Element: None
Description:
Using the summoning seals on his arms he would quickly summon a better version of the Dekkai Jingu technique and instead summon an enormous Old Tombstone which can withstand jutsus of a very very high caliber. Resembles the TRiple Rashomon of Orochimaru. Used as last resort.

Name: Demonic Illusion: Mangekyo Insight
Rank: A-rank
Type: Genjutsu
Element: None
Description:
Sharingan power is needed and an eye contact for this genjutsu to work. As soon as it is achieved darkness will envelop the target and flames will start burning all around and from above a huge fiery mangekyo eyeball would come down like a meteor smashing the enemy. The mental damage might be fatal to weaker ninjas.

Name: Demonic Illusion: Statue of Izanagi
Rank: A-rank
Type: Genjutsu
Element: None
Description:
Sharingan power is needed and an eye contact for this genjutsu to work either.
It begins when the enemy is enveloped in shadows and suddenly a big statue of the God Izanagi appears and chains bind the opponent while being tormented by the spear of Izanagi in the most gruesome ways possible. Mental damage is served greatly and might wreck the psychology of a person for life.

S-rank Jutsus

Tsubako Mandara - Mandala Box
Art: Ninjutsu
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Close (0-5m), Mid (5-10m)

Description: After forming the needed hand seals, Shiranai will form a triangle hand seal and shoot a 3D pyramid of chakra to surround and encase the target. Holding the triangle seal, the clan member can draw their hands together to cause the walls of the jail pyramid to collapse inwards and crush the opponent to an infinitesimal size. The prison is said to be unbreakable, unless Shiranai removes the spell and ends the jutsu. However, if another manages to disrupt the triangle seal, it will cause the hold of the pyramid to weaken. A sufficient force from the inside may also break the triangle. The resulting break will release a huge explosion of energy, which is directed at Bishamonten and he is hit. It doesnt kill him but sever damage is made.



Weapons and Inventory

Gunbai Uchiwa (A fan used in war)
Description: It is a huge fan exactly like the one Madara used to have in his youth but the colors were different - they were as the Uchiha clan colors Red and white below and there were no signs of the sharingan.
Abilities: This fan enables Shiranai using Wind Release Techniques. It is also very good against physical attacks and can block lots of attacks with it.

khakkhara - Buddhist Monk Staff
Description:
Spoiler:
Abilities: Some genjutsus are cast using the sound of rings on the staff

Magatama Necklace
Description:
Spoiler:
Abilities: It has a seal inside which when released destroys the lock on the huge chakra pool of Shinarai and lets him his other part of his chakra pool. It is used as last resort as huge chakra pool used fully costs lots of stamina and in order not to get reckless Shinarai sealed his other half of his enormously huge chakra pool.

Katana
Description: Shiranai-sama 00-7X50
Abilities: It is made of a very strong metal that is said to be forged in another continent rather than the ninja one and is very hard to be cut but is rather very sharp and can easily slice through stuff like wood. Stored in a sroll.


History & Roleplay Sample

History:
Wild Youth Years
Bishamonten was born to a powerful Uchiha parents some time before Konoha was founded. He was named after one of the seven Lucky Gods - Bishamonten the god of warriors. As expected by the fierce warrior clan - The Uchiha.
As soon as he grew enough he was already on the battlefield and he was lucky much to have survived...but was it luck or was it power. Bishamonten looked as a promising ninja and maybe a future leader of the Uchiha clan though.

Bishamonten killed for fun and was a very ruthless man who was selfish and arrogant and would not hesitate to kill an Uchiha relative for power. He was nicknamed "the Relentless Storm" and his name grew famous around the world and he was feared, when facing someone they'd usually run.
The fierce Uchiha hated the Senju to the depths of his hearts and constantly when having the chance killed lots of them despite being hard to do so.
Those were the youth years of the murderer Bishamonten.

Bishamonten's Rise and Fall from Power
Soon as he grew more in age Bishamonten became very strong and his sharingan could not be beat by any of his clanmates and he became the Uchiha clan leader after the previous one died sacrificing himself for Bishamonten while his name became more famous than ever and soon he knew that battle with the FIrst Hokage was inevitable.

The Uchiha's conquest was spread even more due to Bishamonten's leading capabilities and power and they soon became the most widespread and powerful clan on the land and that brought a lot of hate and enemies to their doors.
That also brought the first Hokage.

Katashi Senju was the leader of the Senju and soon he came with a treaty to end the war and build up a village together. Bishamonten was against that but the other members did not obey him and left him griefing because of that betrayal.

Bishamonten had finally decided what to do - face Katashi Senju the first Hokage in a duel for his position.
They fought for more than 4 hours without stopping which was recorded as the most legendary battle in all time. It resulted with the defeat and "death" of Bishamonten.
From that day on he promised never to use the corrupt power of the sharingan and never fight again.

Becoming stronger
As a young wandering monk the redeemed Uchiha decided to find a way to sign contract with the Holy creature - the tanuki. He found them in a dangerous forest and passed their trials and became the first contractor with them.

His adventures continued around the land as he helped lots of people and while his face was masked his kindness was never forgotten and people soon started talking about the Blessed Stranger (Shukufuku Sareta no Shiranai Hito) or just the Stranger (Shiranai) and his helping nature.
But each night that same monk kept being haunted by nightmares.

As he became famous he became targeted and despite his power he had to improve and sharpen his long not used techniques. The Stranger was not found for more than 70 years sharpening skills, some thought he was dead but they were wrong as he soon appeared at a village where another, this time much younger helper had appeared.

Meeting Reza Fuuma and his friend

It seemed that another helping wanderer was wandering in a quest of seld-discovery but in the meantime helped people. The village the boy was staying was a poor village and the Fuuma was helping them by gathering food, wood and so on and giving them money from errands he did in the city.

Shiranai was impressed at the boy who had no arrogance within him at all.
The cloaked figure decided to get to know to the boy and soon knew his name was Reza Fuuma. Shiranai promised he would never forget his name and helped out Reza with various things.

The last day before Reza and his friend were going to leave a huge raid of bandits came. This seemed to trigger something old in Reza's memories who without thought charged at the horde of ninja-bandits. He was repelled due to their number.
Reza seemed not to know Shiranai's abilities and fought protecting the peace-loving monk. The Uchiha who saw his endless ambition to preserve and how he put his life on the line finally broke his promise on not fighting and joined in the fight showing his great abilities at fighting. Together the 3 men fought off the horde and saved the village.
After that commotion the two went different paths while Shiranai made Reza promise he would keep helping those in need and disappeared without goodbye because he knew someday he'd see him again at least he hoped so.

Roleplay Sample:


Check Minato Juki for it.









THANK YOU, TYLER! WITHOUT YOU I COULD'VE NEVER EVEN THOUGHT OF THIS IDEA, THANK YOUR FOR SHARING WITH ME YOUR GREAT CHRACTERS AND SHARING WITH ME AND TEACH ME TO HAVE SUCH EPIC CREATIVITY AS YOURS.
I HOPE I FIND YOU SOMEDAY AGAIN! IT WAS FUN ON SANNIN!
THANKS AGAIN,
DEAR BEST FRIEND (NEXT UP TO NIEKO!)


Credits go to Tyler for most if not all of the stuff up there - a great guy with one heck of knowledge in Naruto. I hope we meet again, Tyler!


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PostSubject: Re: Shiranai-sama   Shiranai-sama Icon_minitimeFri Jul 23, 2010 1:45 pm

APPROVED!!
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PostSubject: Re: Shiranai-sama   Shiranai-sama Icon_minitimeFri Jul 23, 2010 1:58 pm



Quote :


This is a jutsu of Kakuzu's dark chakra Remove please

Name: Wind Release: Pressure Damage (Futon: Atsugai)
Rank: B-rank
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Wind
Description:
A
powerful wind technique which is released by Shiranai's fan. A
tornado-like mass is compressed until it has a very high density and is
then released. The wind pressure is raised to its highest limit, and
once the technique hits the target, everyone will be swept off their
feet.
If the technique is used by someone who has mastered wind
nature transformation, the blast can hit a vast range, inflicting
massive damage on both the target and their surroundings.




Remove Any Summoning Jutsu, those need to be made using the summoning template.


Once those are removed I shall look over the rest.
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PostSubject: Re: Shiranai-sama   Shiranai-sama Icon_minitimeFri Jul 23, 2010 4:43 pm

[quote]Tsubako Mandara - Mandala Box
Art: Ninjutsu
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Close (0-5m), Mid (5-10m)

Description: After forming the needed hand seals, Shiranai will form a triangle hand seal and shoot a 3D pyramid of chakra to surround and encase the target. Holding the triangle seal, the clan member can draw their hands together to cause the walls of the jail pyramid to collapse inwards and crush the opponent to an infinitesimal size. The prison is said to be unbreakable, unless Shiranai removes the spell and ends the jutsu. However, if another manages to disrupt the triangle seal, it will cause the hold of the pyramid to weaken. A sufficient force from the inside may also break the triangle. The resulting break will release a huge explosion of energy, which can level much of the surrounding area.[/quote

Please weaken this or make it easier for the person trapped to get out
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PostSubject: Re: Shiranai-sama   Shiranai-sama Icon_minitimeFri Jul 23, 2010 4:56 pm

I edited it. What about now ?
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PostSubject: Re: Shiranai-sama   Shiranai-sama Icon_minitimeFri Jul 23, 2010 5:31 pm

S-Ranked Jounin is not accepted at the moment. Change the Rank. Also, remove all S-Ranked Jutsu.

In addition to this... explain how your Character's History is different than Uchiha Madara. It's the overlying theme I'm looking for, not the specifics. Your Character was pitted against the "First Hokage" for a bit for Rank. How is that different? Also... who's to say that the First Hokage was not before his lifetime?
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